Five Sentence Fiction — Home

Monday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Home

Here’s my offering:

Electric fan
Tony Gambolli was cursing the heat from his sweat soaked mattress, a thread bare sheet tangled into a knot at his feet and a ceiling fan ineffectively pushing hot air around the small room. This was his home now and it was a place where time seemed to stand still; it was 3:18 in the morning according to the bedside clock and the fan had developed a tic-tic-tic sound that was nearly as annoying as the small yapping dog somewhere outside. The shade in the window wasn’t long enough to pull all the way down and the neighbor’s post lamp threw a sliver of harsh light across his eyes almost no matter how he lay on the bed. Despite his constantly shifting positions, the mattress relentlessly reflected his body heat mirroring his every move while the warm temperatures made his feet and hands feel like they had swollen to Mickey Mouse proportions. A quick check confirmed that the clock still read 3:18 and Tony belatedly wished he had been a better person when he had still been living.

Got five sentences? Share them!

If you enjoy flash fiction challenges stop by each week to participate in my writing challenge offered every Tuesday. Take your pick from two, yes that’s right, two different prompts that I will be providing right here weekly.


10 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Home

  1. Very effective. Not easy to squeeze something out of that constriction.

    • Thanks so much for stopping by. That’s the challenge of five sentence fiction, to get as much as you can out while staying inside the parameters of five scant sentences. I got hooked more than a year ago and haven’t missed a week. I love it. Thanks again.

  2. What a great punch for the prompt.

    • I seem to have entered the “dark side” Most of my stuff lately seems to be centered around death and dying. I’m a pretty upbeat happy-go-lucky kind of guy with a decent sense of humor. I guess my own life seems pretty staid and boring so I look elsewhere for inspiration. I’ve tried happy, upbeat FSF posts and they generally fall flat. Good to see you again! Thanks for taking the time to comment!

    • Thanks Barbara! I look forward to FSF each week and was bummed last week when lillie was having ‘technical difficulties’ with her site. I appreciate your comment and feedback!

  3. Oh yuk. I’m hot and sticky just reading what Tony has to put up with – your descriptive wording is spot on again.

  4. WHAM!! Superb writing and brilliant ending!

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