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Five Sentence Fiction — Shadows

Monday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Shadows.

grand old tree
Here’s my offering:

The breeze tiptoed through the branches disrupting the shadows that now danced across Terri’s face. She had been dozing lightly and opened her eyes from her spot beneath this grand old tree with young, nearly translucent leaves that were backlit by brilliant sunlight. She recognized the twitter of a cardinal and the sorrowful who-EW-who-who-who of the mourning dove and the sad answering call of a distant mate. She tracked the progress of a squirrel which made its way out to the impossibly thin tip of a branch and in a gravity defying performance jumped successfully to a neighboring tree. But the tears overcame her again as she ineffectually struggled against the stakes and ropes–holding her flat to the ground—that chaffed at her bloody wrists and ankles, as she wondered how many more days before she was found; and her mind turned over to inspect the infinitely more terrifying word “if.”

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9 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Shadows

  1. Mercy. What started as an almost tranquil scene dipped into something scary toward the end. What in the world got her in this spot? Making me think and speculate.

    • The twist is what it’s all about. I’m glad it got you thinking. The whole idea was to start out with the feeling that she was laying under a tree blissfully soaking up a beautiful spring day and then the understanding that she’s not in such a good place after all, becomes very clear…

  2. Good stuff! The twist is quite a powerful one. You know the old adage – if you can’t make it big, make it funny. I’d add to that – if you can’t make it big make it funny or horrifying. Or both?

  3. My goodness, now that is a twist. The pastoral setting at the beginning, makes the horrid setting at the end even darker. Excellent last sentence. Nicely done.

  4. […] Words and Pictures Today it’s unintended Consequences I decided to take a cue from his previous entry and write something a little on the horrifying side. I tried to make it something that causes the […]

  5. Good story. But now we want to know what happens next…

  6. Well sentences 1-4 were full of nature and quite lovely, before 5 brought us back down to earth with a terrifying bump. Well done.

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