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Five Sentence Fiction — Angles

Monday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Angles.

freezer-burn
Here’s my offering:

Neil thought he had all the angles covered. He had waited until almost quitting time before entering, flipping the “open” sign to “closed” and locking the door so no one else would walk in while he was demanding the the full day’s take with a little persuasion from the barrel of a pistol; the haul was much more than he had anticipated.

He gathered everyone up, even checked the bathrooms where he found one of the cooks sitting on the crapper, and marched them all into the walk-in freezer which had no handle on the inside. He had carefully collected all their cell phones and dumped them in a trashcan outside the door but then the manager had to go all Mr. High-and-Mighty, saying something about not getting away with any of this so Neil lunged at the fat man to teach him a thing or two, which was when the click of the big door behind him stopped him cold in his tracks.

And, damn, it was definitely cold in there, but at least there was plenty of food and as if reading Neil’s mind one of the cooks said, “…you want fries with that frozen burger?”

Got five sentences? Share them!

If you enjoy flash fiction challenges stop by any time each week to participate in my writing challenge presented every Tuesday. Take your pick from two, yes that’s right, two different prompts that I provide right here weekly.

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4 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Angles

  1. Hoist by his own petard methinks. The Neil you described is not a nice man so I laughed at his misfortune when I got to the end.

  2. I thought the picture was a nice three layer melted cheese sandwich on multi-grain bread. I thought, here’s another of Andy’s awesome food based stories. I thought wrong. New glasses are in order.

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