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Five Sentence Fiction — Words

Monday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Words.

Folding Chrome Walker
Here is my offering:

Slit, yellow tennis balls that looked like they were trying to devour the front legs of the chrome walker whispered across the carpet ahead of Walter Blankenship who was slowly making his way back to his room while trying to rid his mouth of dinner’s unpleasant, gummy aftertaste. The music—actually, “ooze-ic” was a probably better term—dripped from the PA system with a saccharinely generic, familiarity and Walter played his little game of trying to identify the person most closely associated with each tune. Will Sapphire or something like that—no that was all wrong— Sapphire was a writer or news anchor or something or other but definitely not someone in the pop music field.

“Diamond,” he said suddenly, “what’s-his-face—Neil—it’s Neil Diamond, the guy with all the hair—no wait that’s not right either, its Hoffer-something or Hopperdink… aw crap, forget it.” I might not remember his name, he thought, but at least I know the words to the song and when the chorus came around again he began to croon at full volume: “Ceilings, nothing more than ceilings; trying to forget those ceilings above…”

My apologies to recording artist and one hit wonder Morris Albert who had the hit “Feelings” in 1974 written by Louis Gasté. Englebert Humperdinck (among others) did record a version of it but it was not the one that everyone knows. If you weren’t around in the mid 1970s then you might not know the real words:

Got five sentences? Share them!

If you enjoy flash fiction challenges you should also stop by each week to participate in my own writing challenge offered every Tuesday. Take your pick from two, yes that’s right, two different prompts that I will be providing right here weekly.

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9 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Words

  1. http://www.allmusic.com/album/70s-party-classics-killers-mw0000597914
    I’d put this on when it was time for folks to leave. Thanks for the ear worm! Bastard.

  2. Lovely writing! This entry gave so many details and a much deeper glimpse into Walter’s life. It reminded me (for some weird reason) of Water for Elephants.
    I’m new to flash and have found I am enjoying all the different challenges immensely.

    • FSF is highly addictive or at least it has been for me. I’ve been doing for a year and it has improved my descriptive ability. I am glad you liked my story. I have never read Water for Elephants but I have heard good things about it. I’ll add it to my “To Read” list…

  3. Completely freakin’ hysterical! Loved this one, Andy.

    • Thanks. My dad lives in assisted living, so the music, bad food and abundance of chrome walkers fitted with tennis balls to keep the feet from snagging on anything were all details from there. The rest is fictional though…

  4. He he..loved it.

  5. Andy, wonderful setting and imagery. You’ve given us a complete picture of someone in 5 sentences and a smile at the end. Really nicely done!

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