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Five Sentence Fiction — Ending

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Ending.

elderly man
Here is my offering:

“Come in!” he called in response to my knock and so I poked my head around the door. There he sat a little groggy as if I had interrupted a nap. He was a future image of me; same bald head, pronounced nose, brown eyes peering back through wire frame glasses—my own Dorian Gray portrait.

“Hey, how’s it going?” I asked and he uttered four words that grimly marked both an end and a beginning.

“Who are you, again?”

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5 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Ending

  1. Sad, many of us face this in our lives with our loved ones, very difficult.

  2. I’m just going to say that this is simultaneously your best and worst piece (that I’ve read…). It’s a conundrum! I say this because conceptually and humour-wise it’s brilliant but at the same time when reading it the language didn’t grab me. I can’t explain why to be honest, just put down the first thoughts as they came…
    As always, it’s fun to drop by your blog and I’d like to wish you a happy new solar revolution and all the best for the coming days.
    Cheers!

    • Spider– I know what you mean. I was not fully happy with this one either. The subject is near and dear to my heart but I couldn’t get the words to convey the feeling I wanted. They all can’t be home runs. Thanks for the honest feedback. I think it is spot on…

      • See, this is why I like interacting with you – most people would be instantly pissed at my comment but you get that it was not coming from a malicious place. 🙂
        That said though, if you ever get the time, I’d love to hear more from you, even a couple of lines on some of the fiction I post up – don’t have to comment on the other stuff. Not obligated to, just appreciate your opinion.
        Cheers.

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