Five Sentence Fiction — Vision

Tuesday is when I usually tackle some Five Sentence Fiction but I suspect that I will be otherwise occupied this Tuesday so I am posting this one a day early. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Vision.

christmas tree
Here is my offering:

Virginia made her way down the dark hallway—the first one upon the scene—and could see from the top of the stairs the glow of the tree which held the pre-dawn gloom gently at bay. Tears of joy briefly pooled in her eyes fracturing the twinkling, colored lights into spears that pinwheeled with each movement of her head. A great mountain range of boxes covered in patterned paper and colored ribbons had heaved up overnight as if two continental masses had collided some time after she had been ushered to bed; she knew and cared nothing about plate tectonics but rather ascribed to the magic and efforts of a certain man in red. Even the house clicked and popped as if it too was trying to hold its excitement in check and the heater hissed but did little to keep the morning chill from worming through her pajamas and settling on her shoulders and neck. The floor squeaked under a foot and she looked up into a face crisscrossed with pillow creases as her father said from beneath a cloud of sleep-tangled hair, “Come on, let’s go see what Santa brought us this year.”

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“Merry Christmas to all and to all a good night!”


4 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Vision

  1. I liked this. I admit to holding my breath for a twist so I’m glad it was sweet and captured the feeling of Christmas morning.

  2. Yeah. I went for just a slice of life on this one. I didn’t want to mess with Christmas. Have a wonderful holiday.

  3. So sweet, and you perfectly captured the excitement of Christmas morning. I loved the image of the father, with his “sleep-tangled hair”

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