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Five Sentence Fiction — Business

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Business.


Here is my offering:

The company costume party was in full swing when Drew hit the men’s room; all that beer. A skinny dude lamely dressed as a cowboy—chaps, jeans, boots, aluminum foil covered cardboard spurs, a checkered shirt, leather vest and a 10-gallon hat—was standing at the urinal on the right.

“Hey, what’s shakin’?” said the cowboy peering over the divider at him through a big, thick, fake mustache. Drew frowned and gave a curt nod in reply without looking back; he considered conversation at the urinal while taking care of business to be bad form. When he turned around he stopped in mid zip because the cowboy, who was still there and leaning against the counter putting on her lipstick, stuck out a hand saying, “Howdy pardner, I’m Jennifer from reception.”

Got five sentences? Share them!

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18 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Business

  1. love this idea – i enjoy writing haiku due to the minimal word usage rule

  2. Give it a whirl! It’s lots of fun and down right addictive. Leave a piece of Five Sentence Fiction here or head over to Lilie McFerrin’s site and post a link there. I’ve been doing it every week since April. I haven’t missed a week.

  3. Oh my goodness what a conundrum, great write enjoyed it very much!

  4. Ever walk in to the lady’s room by mistake? It’s pretty disorienting. Almost as much as trying to figure out what Jen was doing at the urinal. Hmmm.

    As ksbeth almost suggested, try reducing the story to a haiku. I’ve been doing that with mine lately.

    Who’s in the men’s room,
    All decked out for rodeo?
    Oh – it’s that guy, Jen.

    Cheers!
    JzB

  5. Nice twist. What will he do?

  6. Lilly loved Mark, but she was getting tired of him never being home. Mark was a hard working businessman, and he was devistated when Lilly told him she wanted to break up. The next morning, when Lilly went to go check for mail, she found a letter that contained a plant ticket and directions to a fancy spa in Hawaii. It was from Mark, saying how he was sorry he was never home and how he bought it for her so she could relax. But when she got to her hotel room, she was surprised to find Mark waiting there, with a ring box.

  7. “I hate Black Friday!” Schubert mumbled to his dashboard as he headed to work on Thanksgiving evening, “My turkey hasn’t even digested and the football game isn’t over. It seems like every year they make us come to work earlier and earlier. Don’t these businesses know how silly it all is?” he lamented to the steering wheel as he turned the car into the morgue’s parking lot. “Another year of trampled early shoppers.”

    Daughter and I did a 5 sentence AND 5 minute challenge. We had to finish within that time frame.

  8. Awkward. Just… Awkward. I wasn’t sure how to react and I imagine Drew knew either. A snog in the restroom? Or questioning Jennifer’s true gender? Hmmm. Nicely done.

  9. I love this one – made me laugh out loud as I read the punch line, plus I could vividly see the look of both parties within my mind. Excellent piece, well done 🙂

  10. Oh what fun this ending was, didn’t see that coming, but now that I’ve read it to the finish, it makes sense. She certainly couldn’t use the ladies room dressed like that, could she?! 🙂

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