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Five Sentence Fiction — Character

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Character.


Here is my offering:

The woman collapsed to the sidewalk; she went down suddenly and hard like it was electricity that had been keeping her erect and someone had yanked the plug. Another woman—a virtual stranger—rushed to her side taking complete charge, ordering coats off the backs of others to keep the “patient” warm and demanding that someone else call an ambulance. Garrick Needles gasped, murmured and brought a hand to his mouth, the perfect portrait of concern for the unfortunate woman on the sidewalk. Deep down, however, he was disgusted with his lack of the kind of strength of character that others are evidently capable of. He melted away from the gathering knot of onlookers and checked his watch not wanting to miss his regular bus that would get him home in time to see Alex Trebek host Jeopardy.

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14 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Character

  1. … or lack of! Well captured, a snapshot of real life: a lovely post 🙂

  2. never fail to intertain us–you and Alex. good post.

  3. Now that was a good read. What an awful character Mr Needles is – but, to be honest, most likely a true reflection of society today. Very well done 🙂 And thank you for visiting me at the Hearth, feel free to drop in anytime, as there’s always a place in the nook next to the fire.

  4. You should have asked people to post their comments in the form of a question…
    For $100, what was Mr. Needles lacking?

    Good story!

  5. So enjoyed this take on the prompt. Yes, life tests our character in ways big and small. Mr. Needles is very well-defined by his actions. Good job!

  6. Loved it! Showing character in others while showing a character flaw in the main character, well done.

  7. Priories. He’s got ’em. I don’t think he’s a bad person. Not everyone acts when they should. Too hard on himself.

    • Yeah, but if you place a higher priority on a game show than the health and well being of another human being, that’s a little skewed. He’s one of those people that keeps saying to himself: “Don’t get involved, don’t get involved, don’t get involved…”

      As always, though, I love getting your perspective. Keep those cards and letters coming…

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