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Five Sentence Fiction — Quiver

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction.

This week Five Sentence Fiction turns one year old and Lillie has left the choice of prompt up to each author, using any prompt she has offered up over the past year.  I have picked the word Quiver.

Here is my offering:

His left cheek began to quiver uncontrollably like a horse’s flank trying to repeatedly rid itself of a persistent fly and Davis rubbed at it to try to quell the spasm. He adjusted his glasses back on his nose and cleared his throat feeling extremely self conscious and inadequate. When he thought she wasn’t looking, he tried to sneak a quick sniff of his right armpit even though there wasn’t anything he could do about any potential odor at this point.

“Jeez, Davis, settle down,” she told him, “it’s no big deal, he’s just my dad.”

Her words had barely faded when her father walked into the room and Davis shot to his feet, summoned the courage to stick out his right hand and after a gulp he squeaked out the three words, “Evening, Mr. President.”

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12 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Quiver

  1. WOW! Did not see that coming! Wonderful short.

  2. That’s a lot of pressure!! Lol. Nice story. 🙂

  3. Can you imagine – I think you captured the terror he must have felt perfectly!

  4. No big deal indeed. I had no idea where this was going. FSF should have a punch at the end, and this one sure does. Good job.

    JzB

  5. Ahhh! It’s hard enough for a guy to meet his date’s father, but to have her father be the President, now that’s gotta be a bit intimidating, and you told the tale very well. I could just see this poor guy wrought with anxiety. I do hope their meeting all went well! A fun read that left me smiling. 🙂

  6. Ha ha, your final word brandishes power, and lifts it from the usual ‘meeting the parents’ nerves to nerves that will truly quiver!

    • Lisa– You’re absolutely right. It’s the very last word that changes everything. Substitute the last word with “Jones” and the story falls flat. Thanks for your comments and support. I appreciate your stopping by!

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