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Five Sentence Fiction — Devotion

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Devotion.

Here is my offering:


“Kitten heads are on the table,” she called, “come on you little monsters, out of bed and get down here while they’re still fresh and warm.” 

Three growling demons scratched and clawed their way downstairs fighting to be first to sink their teeth into the rare treat. They roared and tumbled into the kitchen pawing at the spread on the table all making mock mewing sounds. Steam rose off of the basket of golden, bumpy drop biscuits with the quirky  feline moniker—each about the size of a cat’s noggin—flanked by a crock of softened butter, two bowls of preserves providing a choice of either raspberry or apricot and a plate piled with eight rashers of crisp bacon. Casey Kelley, a single, working mom, shook her head beneath a cloud of bed hair, her blue eyes sparkling with devotion for her gang of four-year-old triplets and whispered to herself through an amused smile, “Pfff…boys.”

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18 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Devotion

  1. What a twisty little story absolutely delightful!

  2. Utterly delightful! A great take on the prompt with an appetising slant. Well done.

  3. Absolutely wonderful! Great intro…and I’ve been there (not with triplets, but three all the same!)

    • We had our hands full with one and only one so I am filled with admiration for those who are raising 2 or more. Mine’s in college now so I feel we’ve been successful so far. Thanks for the kind words.

  4. Omg. Totally had me believing they were legit zombies about to eat legit kitties. You’re a tricky one, Mr. Black. Love how you brought us around to the end. Nicely done.

  5. Oh how we love our little monsters!! Thanks – this piece brought a big smile to my face!

  6. 4-year-old triplet boys! The woman isn’t just devoted. She’s a saint. 😉

    • So true. I can only image what raising triplets would be like. While the ones in this bit of flash fiction are rambunctious they are happy at this point. I wouldn’t want to be around when things got ugly… Thanks for stopping by!

  7. Oh how funny! Intially thinking I was treading into gruesome waters, as the plot lightened up I found myself laughing and agreeing at how such fare would delight a trio of young boys! At our house we had cookies made with cutters in the shape of hands and feet… “cannibal cookies” and they were always a great hit! 🙂

  8. Quite nice. Simple, cute and nicely written.
    I do wish you that last line was not so run-on-ish. If you ever decide to rewrite this, I’d advise extending that last bit a little or splitting it somehow.
    Cheers.

  9. I could smell the bacon! Creative little post.

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