Five Sentence Fiction — Night

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Night.

Here is my offering:

It was the fact that Tracy was home schooled that had allowed them to take their summer vacation after Labor Day to avoid the end-of-summer-crush of crowds that invariably spilled into the last week of August. They had thoroughly enjoyed their time in Nantucket, but David’s plan had been to fly back to LA early to deal with work while his wife and daughter stayed to finish out the week. 

Before climbing into bed, he stood and stared at a keepsake—now inshrined under glass—from that family trip over a decade passed; his wife waited patiently for him to complete his nightly ritual. She had saved his life with seven ordinary words.  As he gently kissed his fingertips and touched them to the framed United Airlines boarding pass dated September 11, 2001, he could clearly recall his wife’s plea all those years ago, “Aw, come on, stay through the 12th.”

Got five sentences? Share them!



15 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Night

  1. A powerful flash, bringing back some painful memories.

  2. Heartfelt and intense… and unforgettable…
    I can still remember where I was, what time of day it was (my end of the world) and what I was doing, at that particular moment on 9/11…

  3. I am so overwhelmed everytime I hear or see the numbers 9-11. this is such a beautiful story thank you.

  4. Very powerful and beautifully put! Heartfelt…

  5. Oh wow! That was a great story.

  6. Another one from my kid, who is a new fan of your work:

    Four weeks ago tonight Kate had found out her husband was cheating on her. She told him to meet her at diner where they first met, for dinner,then she would know he would never cheat on her again; but if he didn’t, he would have to sign the divorce papers.But little did she know that across town, he was in the hospital after being in a car crash, begging the doctors to let him go to dinner to save his marriage; with no success. As the hours passed Kate got tired of waiting and left, but as she left, she saw a man run into the diner covered in bandages. She thought to herself, “that couldn’t be him, its not like he was in a car crash.”

    • Nice irony! Thanks for sharing. I hope you continue to write, you have some wonderful ideas at such a young age. I’m more than 4 times your age and still struggle to come up with ideas. Good work. And just to give you heads up, the word for Tuesday is “Blush,” so you have 5 days to come up with something!

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