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Five Sentence Fiction — Medicine

Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Medicine.

Here is my offering:

The smoke whirled and eddied—blue and thick—smelling oddly of cat pee, while my vision blurred and sharpened in turns. My head felt enormous and too heavy to be supported by a neck that had somehow grown noodle-thin and rubbery. The flickering shadows harbored terrifying evils that vibrated with potential threats and ill intent, but were unidentifiable—cloaked by haze and darkness—which only amplified their malice.

“Let me out of here,” I shouted, a command which emerged as an unintelligible yodel causing everyone to laugh darkly like school-yard bullies. What did the old medicine man put in that pipe?

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7 comments on “Five Sentence Fiction — Medicine

  1. Man, this has a decidedly sinister feel to it. It’ll cure or kill, guess he’ll find out soon which it is.

  2. Unique take on the prompt, Andy. So glad someone thought of the medicine man aspect and you wrote it well!

  3. Nice one – and I like the direction because I think anything else would have been a poorer ending! 🙂

  4. Very interesting! I really love the use of language and the visuals you have created – makes the story mysterious! Great job!

  5. I enjoyed your description of how he felt, especially his rubbery head and ‘noodle-thin; neck! Nice and sinister…and oddly enticing!

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