Tuesday is when I tackle some Five Sentence Fiction. Feel free to take Lillie McFerrin’s challenge to write a five sentence story based on a single word prompt. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just used for direction. This week’s word is Flawed.
Here is my offering:
Everything was perfect. A personal chef was hired who had developed an inspired menu: lobster bisque for the first course, caramelized sea scallops on a bed of mushroom and truffle risotto for the second followed by a melt-in-your-mouth filet mignon dressed with blue cheese and a side of artichoke hearts, and finally a dessert of warm, tender, freshly made donut holes served with coffee flavored whipped cream. He set the table with their best china and silver, lit the candles, decanted the wine and put on the rented tux while the chef began clattering around in the kitchen—their house had never smelled so delicious.
Jakob waited anxiously for Annalisa to walk in the door when he would surprise her with a bouquet of roses and a gourmet dinner being prepared right in their own home. He wasn’t aware of the flaw in his plan until his wife called from her mother’s house in tears; their anniversary had been last week.
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Oh my gosh! What a twist, flawed ? hmmm more like skewered.
Skewered. I like the word. It goes with the food theme. Skewered and roasted over a pit of coals…
So realistic: we feel for him, and of course for his wife too, malediction! But a nice piece of domestic fiction
Thanks for your continued support. Glad you liked it!
Oh no! The poor guy. I hope she forgives him-he obviously loves her tremendously.
He was trying REALLY hard. A valiant effort but alas all went horribly wrong. I think she would forgive him once she realizes the effort he went to.
Ha-ha, having been on the receiving end of that (the forgetfulness, not the gourmet dinner), I really enjoyed the story. Might have to share it with my husband!
It’s something I have thought of doing but never brought to fruition. I think it would be a big hit as long as I do it on the correct night : )
Oh….how sad!
Uh, that reminds me – I have to put a note on my calendar…
now that’s hilarious…
Aw, I hope she comes running home! You always make me feel for your characters! Great writing Andy.
Thanks for the nice words. As always I appreciate your stopping by.
Oh. Dang. Seriously, A for effort even if he did miss that mark by a whole lot. Great story!
I agree. I might have to try that idea making sure to check the calendar first of course…
I’m surprised she didn’t instantly forgive him and come running home. High maintenance?…
I like to think that once he explained all was forgiven. He did go whole hog.
Oh no! But she’s have to forgive him, wouldn’t she …. ?
Don’t worry. She’d have to be putty in his hands once she finds out what he’s up to.
haha!
Thanks… teehee